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The Girl

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Skin, white as bone
She will come
Hair, black as night
She will come
Heart, cold as ice
Hard as stone
She will come
A small knife
Twirling in her hand
She is coming
Merciless eyes glint
With a harsh light
She is coming
Plan formulated in her mind
She has come
Blood-soaked dress
She came and is leaving
Moving towards
A new victim
Just a little something that came to me while I was in a car ride. Please state your honest opinion so I may get better.

EDIT: To be honest, I'm not the happiest with this piece. Wow! This my most popular deviation! Thank you so much :iconsuperenguanapianist: and everyone who faved/commented/saw "The Girl"!
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This reminds me alot of the horror game videos I've been watching lately on YouTube, especially The Witch's House and Misao. ^^; If you don't know any of these games, please disregard their titles, unless if you want to go search them up or whatnot.

I like the description of the girl that's written out in the lines of this poem, and the repeating 'She will come' and 'She is coming'.